Feedback:
Does the front cover engage the reader's interest? Why and how?
- Bright colours are eye-catching
- Eye contact from the student
- Distinct colourscheme
I agree with the feedback given and I believe I could not further improve my front cover from the feedback.
What do the sell lines reveal about the reader?
- They strive for success
- Want to combine school with a social life and job- they are an average student
- They are into humanities- Psychology AS for example
This is exactly what I wanted back from my questionnaire and I'm glad I did not alter the sell lines from my inital draft as they worked well on this copy.
Offer one comment about the use of image:
- Quality could be improved
- Like the eye contact and dark clothing (does not take away any focus from model & cover lines)
- Good composition- room for sell lines and masthead
For the image I used an SLR which is good quality, however I did not use a professional backdrop as I did not have access to a white one (a black one would be inappropriate for a magazine as an institution would not be willing to print excessive amounts of black due to expense) nor did I use any professional lighting, this is what let the quality down. None of the other responses say the quality is bad so it would be okay to use this image as it is not that noticeable.
Offer one comment about the use of language:
- Good sell lines, range of linguistic techniques
- Informal- suitable for school magazine
- Too many exclamatives (slightly cheesey)
The comment about exclamatives is fair as 4/6 of my coverlines are exclamatives. I could improve this by using another rhetorical question or a declarative.
Do the pages engage the reader's interest immediately? How could this be improved?
- Yes, lots of text and images
- Good use of highlighting cover lines
- Relatable images, could reduce text size and add more?
The text size is 18 which is huge for a contents page. They are definitely right, I could reduce the font. This would make room for more images and an editors letter.
Does the contents page suggest this is a busy and exciting magazine to read? Offer a suggestion to help improve this quality
- The amount of text shows the magazine is busy
- Use of rhetorical questions & exclamatives
- Way 'contents' is split up is exciting (needs to be larger than magazine logo)
I do not need to alter the amount of text as it is sufficient. The page layout is also effective as there is limited white space.
Are there several subheadings to divide the contents into sections? How effective are these subheadings and how can they be improved?
- Yes- bold, easily visible
- Could be made a different font to stand out further
- Yes, made good use of subheadings
The subheadings are the same font as the rest of my text (except from the subheadings), changing the text would be effective as it would stand out more and make it more exciting visually.
Who do you think this magazine is targeting and how can you tell?
- Not obvious it is targeted at 6th form in comparison to front cover
- Students from FSG
- Pupils and teachers
I have not effectively designed my contents as the target audience is not clear. I attempted to target 6th formers but I put in general articles rather than those targeted at the 6th form.
Offer one comment about use of images
- Good images, relevant to school
- Appropriate amount of images for a contents page
- Could use more images of 6th form students
The images I have used are very general and barely apply to 6th form students. In order to improve this I could take images of friends in school.
Offer one comment about use of language
- Appropriate articles
- Good
- 6th form events???
The articles are general, also. A way to improve them is to include events specifically for 6th form as suggested.
Give one comment about the editors letter
- There is no editors letter
Every magazine has an editors letter but I didn't include one. For my contents page to meet convention I need to include one.
